Princess Prettie

It's so... jolly! I like it, and I like that it rhymes even more. Excellent job :D

Nawat bad. I like it. The first draft gave too much away, like other people said, that's all. The only grammar mistakes I could find were that you spelled "Lily" ...

Yeah... I think you got a little confused. This is a poetry section. If you want to introduce yourself, then go here: Not to mention, there are several grammatial mistakes ...

Hey, welcome to YWS Everyone! I love smiley faces like this :D and this =) because this kind :) is boring. You had the smilies disabled! There, now they'll show ...

I love glitter, and I think Miso soup tastes like blood. But you seem like a pretty freaking tight person. And, I happen to love vodka and cranberry & bare ...

I really, really, REALLY liked that. GREAT imagery... I loved the lines "a canopy of cherry trees", and "the moon our only witness." The only thing I didn't understand was ...

My body is broken as I stand at the edge of Fallen men mountain. I don't quite understand the mountain part of this poem. If it's the name of the ...

That was pretty much way cool. It's really disturbing, and some of it I had to read twice (it's fast-paced), but overall, really well-written. It reminds me of the movie ...

Thankies. I've always had a few issues with paragraphs and spacing, I'll fix that when I get to work on the next chapter.

Okay, this is pretty out there, not like anything I've ever tried before. It could suck, but it might have something, I'm not sure. Just tell me what you think. ...

Thanks for the feedback, and yeah, I did mean to make it all one line. It was pretty late when I typed this so there's probably lots of errors that ...

Flawless pale skin, Encasing a wild and crazy soul That leaks, Slowly but surely From the little slashes upon her wrist. A permanent crease, Above the eyebrows, (That tattletales on ...

Hmm.

thanks for the feedback. so far in the plot, it is very sterotypical, but the rest of where i'm going is so, so far from there... when i was planning ...

Uhhh... I called it that because every picture is supposed to speak 1000 words...